This semester, I learned so much about my writing and ways in which to improve it. I came into this class believing I was a good writer and comes to find out, my writing isn't clear as I thought. The two problem areas I suffered with were my sentence structures and my claims. I wrote too many run-on sentences and I need to add new sentences and began new paragraphs,rather than trying to continue to the same sentence and paragraph with different thoughts. I learned to perfect my writing and ways in which I can improve. The book "They Say I Say" really helped developed my writing.
Revised Essay 1
This essay is about the importance of religion. Individuals have been fighting for their religion and there is an on going war between those who re religious and those who are nonreligious. We have the freedom to accept or decline any religion we please. In other countries, citizens don't have the right to believe in any religion. In fact, religion rules the lives of individuals in foreign countries because the government declared a religion to govern the lives of citizens.Although it may seem like religion is a problem that should be removed, religion gives people hope for tomorrow
My second delves into the personal rights of women. I focus on abortion and whether or not the State should make abortion illegal. It is a personal right that should not be taken away.There are circumstances in which abortion is a primary option for an individual.Abortion has become a war between the life of the mother and the life of the unborn fetus.Abortion is a right that the state should not interfere with.